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Deviousness `ChewedKandi has certainly gone out of her way to keep the vector community on the right path. Always making sure that her talents are infinitely scalable, Sharon has put her bezier curves to excellent use, and firmly anchored herself as an inspirational leader. We're absolutely delighted to bestow the Deviousness Award for June 2013 to `ChewedKandi. Congratulations, Sharon! Read More
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Ok, this is a very great peice, the colors used were really well done and the idea works with the colors. It looks like the two planets just crashed into each other, but I think there should be more of a blast coming from it. The lighting is nice as the light from the blast covers the other planet down in the bottom corner. My experiance with t3D is non existant but I am good at spotting these things. Whe Ifirst saw this I was like WOAH! The stars in the background look perfect. I think it is brilliantly done.
First off, a great color palette you have chosen; it makes the points of interest stand out well while still conveying the vastness of space. The starfield is good, too. Not too prominent or too subtle, just right. However, I'm not writing this critique to point out everything that's done well (which I have seen from some and, personally, I find it defeats the point of critiquing) but rather what could be improved.
For me, the most irritating part is the bottom-right. It is extremely bright and saturated and thus steals the show of the planet in the back. Additionally, it is quite hard to identify what it is exactly; in the end, I settled with a planet due to the curvature of the bright line. The texture is hard to see at first glance which makes the viewer feel a bit lost, and we certainly don't want that! So, let's try to find some solutions to this problem!
Probably the most confusing element is the bright area. If it's illustrating some cataclysmic event, the non-circular shape of it makes it hard to identify it as such. A more shockwave-like form would probably suit better.
Regarding the texture of the planet, not only could it use some brighter highlights to make it easier to see that it is, in fact the surface of a planet. It also feels a bit out of perspective, but this can easily be fixed with the warp-tool.
Actually, I have tried to cover up the bottom third to see how the image looks without the bright lights. I think it looks quite nice on its own but this is purely subjective. Nevertheless, it'd look even better if the top right had a few more details (such as different layerings of the nebula or small pockets of dust obscuring the view). Thus, it can help balancing the whole piece, seeing that, as of now, every other corner of the image is filled with something. The only way the viewer can leave the image is through the top right, so by blocking his "escape-route" with something like the aforementioned more-detailed cloud, you can achieve some neat results. Just make sure that it doesn't steal the show of the other elements.
You have definitely improved over the past two years! Looking at the (if I may call them like that) "beginner-mistakes" on the older pieces, this one here is a couple notches above all of that. Yes, there are a few issues here and there, but the base-package is definitely there. It is great to see an artist reach new heights with every new piece, and I hope to see you continuing to strive for perfection!
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